Sunday, November 1, 2009

What counts as evidence

All words front of you are evidence, it may be first hand evidence or second hand evidence. First hand evidence is a type of evidence that you have to create on your own. Second hand evidence is a form of evidence that you have to find on your own. Chapter 16 in the Dr. Wood’s blue bible, Lunsford Et. Al. 2009 talks about what is or not an evidence. There are six different categories of evidence which can lead you to be a better academic writer.
Six different categories are observations, interviews, experiments, surveys/questionnaires, personal experiences, and library/online resources. Observation is when you pick a subject and you look at it very closely. Then you record what you see and hear from the subject. The subject may be a living thing or nonliving thing. An interview is the communication between you and a person, a subject. You ask the person about his/her background and personal experiences relating to your claim. An experiment is when you collect data or kind of table to provide a detailed support and more believable to your argument. Surveys/Questionnaires are kind of form to ask a majority of people and make an assumption amount of people who do or don’t support your claim. A personal experience piece is the mainly powerful part of the essay you are making. This kind of method draws more readers but it may make the readers to feel negative. This technique is risky and you don’t have to add personal experience in your piece because you have other seven different techniques of evidence to present to the readers. Second hand evidence is library/ online resources. Library and online resources is the easiest way for you to find evidence because you can pull up a book or a website and find some article which is related to your claim.
How this system of varied evidence is do make you a better academic writer, once you insert all of kind of strong true evidence into your piece, and you will have a strong paper. The paper will not stand on a thin spot of ice instead the paper will stand on a thick chunk of concrete. Once you used first hand evidence, you will have a durable piece because first hand evidence is the truth out of people’s voices. First hand evidence is interviews, observations, surveys/questionnaires, and personal experiences. Those kind of evidence are factual than second hand evidence because second hand evidence may be refined though years with different people’s thoughts. For an example, the second hand evidence may change from renaissance age to today because in rebirth, people think women is lower than men. Today, we believe that sex don’t matter to the society. When you write a paper without any evidence but only your thoughts, it may be a feeble paper or a paper with your thoughts called a opinion paper. Once you add one kind of evidence into your piece and then you will have an actual argument.

Monday, October 19, 2009

Pan's Labyrinth Evalutation


Del Toro presented Pan’s Labyrinth to viewers because Del Toro wanted to show the viewers that the movie was against Hollywood movie rules. Del Toro challenged the Hollywood critics with his kind of style and perspective of Pan. His style was to express his emotions through fantasy. His perspective was dealing with the reality by showing abstract and you have to figure out what Del Toro meant. Most of Hollywood tended to show real things and you just see and understand. In Pan, Del Toro wanted you to see, think, figure, and understand. Pan’s Labyrinth is a lot real than other fantasy movies like Alice in the Wonderland because Pan does have meanings in each character and acts they done.
Director’s Note in Pan’s Labyrinth movie, Del Toro told the audience that he was really fell inside the movie and he almost killed himself because he had sleepless nights and blur days. He actually worked the movie out himself. Pan’s Labyrinth became so famous because of Del Toro and his inner feelings into the movie. Del Toro disobeyed Hollywood’s standard movie rules and added his meanings and true horrors in the movie. The movie branded all the audience’s minds. Pan’s Labyrinth showed the audience where all of the viewers actually living on, a land full of violence and blood.
The movie is so unusual than other movies because the movie showed completely full show of violence, killing the miracle worker-the doctor, and the huge impact is a child died in the end. Most of the viewers feel the impact from the movie is a child dying, blood dripping out her little mouth, she was shot by a huge man, and many more. In other way, Del Toro disobeyed the general movie rules because there were SO FEW movies which did showed a child dying. He felt that he have to show the main character, Ofelia dying because it will make the movie to stand out than other movies. The movie has a positive credibility because of its director and producers.
Del Toro showed the movie out of his heart because he wanted to show the audience that where they are living on right now. He wanted to make the audience to think and figure out what Del Toro’s abstracts meant. He stood the movie out because he gave the most horror thing has happened in the movie, the main character a young girl will die in the end. He hated to have this event to happen in the movie but it s only one thing to make the audience to feel the huge impact from the movie and think of this movie rest of their lives.

Sunday, October 11, 2009

PU OWL, GU n Blog Rubrics

Every paper, I have to manage between Gallaudet University’s writing rubric, Dr. Pajka-West blog rubric, and some resources from books or websites such like Purdue University’s Online Writing Lab (OWL). Gallaudet University writing rubric is a material for GU students who write papers for GU English Teachers. The students are supposed to follow this rubric to suit the teachers’ expectations. Dr. Pajka-West blog rubric is for only students who use blogs instead essays. This rubric is little altered than GU writing rubric because the points are specified for blogs. Helpful resources such like Purdue University’s Online Writing Lab (OWL) only helps students who have difficulty to write a paper with strong words and statements. Most of students have their own weakness such like creating a thesis; OWL is specified to help students with those weaknesses. The Purdue University’s Online Writing Lab is very resourceful for Gallaudet University students and Dr. Wood’s students because the OWL does fit GU writing rubric and Dr. Pajka-West’s blog rubric.
GU writing rubric is somewhat flawed but useful in some ways. The rubric has some valuable points like required fluidity, central point, proper word choice, and correct citation. Fluidity, the paper have to be fit in smoothly, once one paragraph is off point than other paragraphs, and the piece may be a turn off. Also proper choice of words is part of fluidity because the word choice changes your feelings with the paper. If the choice is kiddy and the topic is serious, you may feel conflicted with negativity from the piece. Also the thesis is the main idea of the paper and it is part of the fluidity because if your main point is way off from the supporting ideas in the body and then your paper may not fitting for the teacher. The citations are required for the essays and are required to add on the bottom of paper.
Dr. Pajka-West’s blog rubric is the other side of GU writing rubric because the blog rubric kept GU’s important areas but refine them to fit the blogs. The blogs are different than real essays because it contains your own questions, thoughts, and personal engagements. Also the blogs can include other students’ ideas which most of teachers encouraged students to do that. The blog rubric required thesis, fluidity, and word choice which it is similar to GU rubric. Other areas are different because the blogs are more linked to the student. The blog want to have the student’s personal engagement. A personal engagement is the student’s motivation and jumping in the blog. If the student actually did the personal engagement and the blog may be powerful because the student spoke from their heart and head.
One helpful resource, PU OWL, it is very helpful for the students who are struggling with creating thesis statement, presenting arguments with evidence and reasons, proper APA citation, how to make a paper fluid, and many more. Dr. Wood’s presentation about OWL and how OWL is huge with helpful information relating to Lunsford such like structuring an argument. OWL provides different ways of citation, style of writing (creative, tutorial, social sciences, engineering, etc), and writing in different orders. Also it teaches the students how to make a best outline paper which the students could follow with no struggles. One main thing of OWL, it does provide different styles of thesis. Also it shows you how to make a good thesis that hit many points without explaining with hundreds of words.
OWL is so helpful with me when I was in high school, I learned how to write outlines, and I used this method ever since. My high school English teacher encouraged us to play around in OWL so I did and I ended up learning many things such like prewriting, creating introduction, body, and conclusion and weaving together into one piece, and using proper kind of citation for each resource I used. I When I came to Gallaudet University and Dr. Wood gave me two rubrics, Gallaudet University writing rubric and Dr. Pajka-West blog rubric. I had been juggling between those two rubrics and helpful resources such like OWL. I am surprised that I actually survived to middle of semester and I am so ready for more. I don’t think I would pass this class without having helpful resources like OWL. Both rubrics and resources (OWL, etc) are so helpful, you have to figure out the puzzle to fit all resources to figure your paper out. When you pick the important points from those resources and you can make the paper almost perfect. Fluidity, very clear thesis, complete introduction, body, and conclusion, strong reasons/evidence, huge personal engagement, and proper citation will make your piece almost perfect. If you want to have a great piece, you have to juggle between both rubrics and some helpful resources like OWL to get A plus!

Sunday, October 4, 2009

Pan's Labyrinth impressions















When I watched Pan’s Labyrinth for the first time, I had a bad impression from the movie because of its complexion and detailed gore. In addition, I was offended with showing dying of a child. It was distressing to see Ofelia’s eyes flickered out and blood oozed down her lips. But, when my brother pleaded me to watch the movie with him again so I sat down and watched all over from the beginning. I discovered many abstract things and the meanings behind them. I realized that there is a lot more behind the gore. I brought the movie and watched the movie many times and kept finding different things. I kept changing my inner version of this movie every time when the flower bloomed in the end.
The positivity of the movie is the beginning and the end. The beginning with Ofelia reading fairy tales, a fairy tale means a plot with love at first sight nor happily ever after. The hint of Ofelia reading a fairy tale told me that this movie will end happily. Actually, Del Toro gave out a complex point of this hint because the sad part is Ofelia dying but the happiness is the flower blooming. At the first, I believed that the movie will end with a smile branded on my face, I didn’t smile. But after watching the movie more than few times, now I can smile at the end because I realized that Del Toro is trying to tell me that the point of end is not with Ofelia dying but the blooming flower. Also the positivity is by the colors of the beginning and the end. The beginning and end included warm colors such like ruby red, sky blue, olive green, sunny yellow, and many more. In the between the beginning and the end, there is so dark colors such like black, gray, navy blue, etc. But in the end of the movie, the warm colors were brought back. The most positive thing in the movie is the white- purity blooming flower in the end.



The negativity of the movie is the middle. The middle is completely dark and gruesomely. The darkening point started when Ofelia entered in the tree and encountered the frog king. The negativity hit me when the captain reshaped the peasant’s face, torn a rebel’s hand into half, shot the doctor with loads of bullets, and shot Ofelia with no feelings. Also the word of disobedience turned me off. Ofelia ignored the three fairies by eating a grape in the monster’s dungeon, mother refused to believe Ofelia with her imaginary world, Mercedes hid her secrets away the Captain, the doctor gave painkillers to the Rebels while helping the Captain at the same time, and Ofelia told the Faun no to kill her half brother. The most negative thing in the movie is the captain killing Ofelia with no regret.


Tuesday, September 29, 2009

REDO rhetorical analysis



In Stern's piece, “Big - Fat Girl: A True Story,” by Moore (in Lunsford et al. 2009) Stern told that Moore neglects all ostensible experts because Moore considers that beauty, health, and nutrition don’t tell us we should strive to be. Moore’s piece on the relation of the overweight issue in our American society is poorly written. Moore, fat woman who was a fat girl and struggled with her self-esteem by her unfit family. She was raised by an unfit mother who gave her up to her maternal grandmother. Her father was overweight too and was out of picture after her mother shut him out Moore’s life. Moore was raised at her maternal grandmother’s farm in Arkansas and she served Judith very unhealthy food all her childhood. She used the rhetorical techniques by telling her personal experiences and messaging famous people who was overweight and America society accepted them. Also telling her own personal statements like “My flesh resists loss. My fat holds on for dear life, holds on under my bratwurst arms and between my clabber thighs.”
Moore’s other claim, the fat people cannot lose weight because they do have scarred personal experiences inside them. The people who treated the fat people badly, they gave the fat people holes, and the fat people eat hopefully to fill up their holes. This fashions the argument to be social. America’s society considers every woman should be skinny and glamorous. Which gave the fat people and Moore stress, it gave them more holes so they ate more to fill up. Moore claims her trustworthiness by telling her personal experiences about men using her, insulting her that she will break the dive board when she jumps into the swimming pool, and many more. Telling her personal experiences is a hardest thing to tell but she got the guts to but I believes that she do not have any other evidence to tell so she used her personal experiences instead. Also Moore presented the famous people who felt like her. Charles Laughton who was a Academy Award winning actor or Harold Bloom who is a American literary critic and who holds chairs at Yale University and New York University, they were overweight people and America accepted them because their natural talent. That is not fair with skinny famous people with no talent but they were famous because their beauty. Moore argues with this public issue today too.
I trust my feelings about Moore, she told in the article that she was a fat person and couldn’t lose weight, I think that’s a fiction because it seemed that she do have some healthy problems such like she don’t have the right balance of metabolism. I consider that she spoke in her piece without her confidence in it. I believe that Moore used her technique of putting in a personal experience in her piece is an impact to the people. But unfortunately her cover and title do not make any effect to the public. If the public actually open the book and get under the cover, they will feel the huge effect from Moore by her personal horrors. But again, she presented all about her personal experiences and pointing at the famous overweight people. She didn’t support her statements from any doctors or specialists who specified in medical obesity. I respect her anger about her fatness but she do not have enough evidence to support that nobody can help with reducing their obesity. I do not feel determined in her because she only told about her personal experiences. She need to add more rhetorical techniques to capture me.
To feel the last blow of this piece, after Moore told about her personal experiences and she told some of her happiness that she got married twice and had children. She proved to us that a fat woman can be a human, reproduce babies who will always make the mother smile. And the audience of fat haters and bluntly media are the main target for Moore. I feel impressed with Judith Moore with her spilling personal experiences but she seems like she is really bitter with the America’s perspective of fatness. She may need to look the America society in other perspective because the people today were raised from the past, believing that fat is bad. She should give some proposals about changing the America’s perspective of overweight people.

Monday, September 21, 2009

rhetorical analysis

February 27, 2005, one reporter Cassie Biggs wrote about a deaf school in China and told how the school transformed from oral-developed procedure to bilingual and bicultural (bi-bi) method. A deaf school in Tianjin, China, Number One School for the Deaf used the bi-bi method from the west and it was a great development for the children. They began to use this method four years ago and the population of the students being part of this method is still growing. Cassie’s article tried to prove the teachers with deaf education degrees that bi-bi method is the best method to teach deaf students and it will benefit the deaf students in the future. The benefits are the knowledge of communicating between two deaf people and the bond between the deaf person and his/her true identity.

In China, before the inspiration of bi-bi method thorough-out deaf schools, the government had the control over a deaf person’s rights. They can’t drive a car but a motorcycle, have limited choice of jobs, and inadequate education which they lost their interest in education because of the oral teachings. Most of people around the world with education of oral were failed to speak. The people who learned from the bi-bi method were success with the interaction around the world with the hearing people with their own identity being a deaf person. Some issues were raised with this piece because the writer spoke the pros of bi-bi method while the China’s laws were against a deaf person having their own right. This were also part of the cultural argument because of China’s beliefs, they believed a hearing person is a normal person. A deaf person is a mental retarded.

The media buzzed around after the article was posted because of the truth of bi-bi method and the conflict between hearing parents and the deaf child. The hearing parents spent their money on oral education, hearing aids, and cochlear implants. Most percent were failures, they spent lots of money on research, devices, and many more but the technology is helpless with the gene- deafness. Two boys were part of the piece, Zhang and Zhao. They were raised in a hearing family and came to the school with no language. They grew up in the school with barely few spoken words such like mother or father. The school juggled the oral teaching with other subjects- math, science, reading, and English. When they decided to test the new method of bi-bi from the west, today with Zhang and Zhao, they can communicate through sign language and feel the pride being a deaf person. They could read, write, and feel like other hearing kids. At the result, the students from the new method class increased their knowledge and even up their intelligence as a hearing child. They are able to work and live like everybody else today.

Saturday, September 12, 2009

List of This I Believe

List of This I Believe
- Children of Future
o Our children and grandchildren will be graduated from college and they will have their own jobs which brings their next generation to farther in future with success.
- Drinking/ Drugs/ Excessive tattoos and piercings= FAD
o Drinking, drugs, excessive tattoos and piercings will be a fad, being a acholoic or addicted to meth will be so rare, excessive tattoos/piercings is too harmful to the body and will be realized and brought to an end.
- Future with no questions with fear
o We will be prepared with anything. We learned from 9/11 and many more such like gulf war and Vietnam war. The army and national authority will be prepared with negotiations and treaties, not with blood.
- Technology under control by humans
o Today, the technology is creating new technology for us. It may gain control but we will not allow it. We will gain more control over the race of technology.
- Deaf like us blend in
o Hearing people will finally accept us like a normal person and we may join army and other organizations who were disapproved a person with hearing impaired. We can say hearing and us are equal.
- No enemies- America has none
o The land of freedom will have no enemies; we will serving with peace treaties instead guns and bullets. Today, we are fixing Arabians’ bodies with bullets. In future, we don’t, we will fix them with papers with signatures.
- Cruelty of rape, abuse, etc is gone
o Such awful ideas of psychopaths who did those things today, we will decrease those mishaps of people with mentally distorted by putting them away and consult them into a better and straight-minded person
- Favoritism is just a word in dictionary with no examples
o There is lot of favoritism muddled up in the politics and other places, our children of future will reduce them and increase the honesty and trust. There may be new positive word in the dictionary, trustism or honestism.
- Go green
o Many years before us, the mothers and fathers didn’t realize that they actually hurting the world by creating papers, ink, and many more. We will increase the recycling and “E” technology, E-Mailing, etc.
- No mischief with animals
o We are killing animals by eating meats or using their bodies for our products. Every animal have their soul like us does. They can do think and respond. We are creating organizations to stop such like Whale Wars, etc. But our children will increase the cluster of organizations relating to those issues of harming animals.